The chapstick topic runs the risk of the adcomms perceiving u to be shallow, self-absorbed and neurotic. Moreover, picking such a trivial issue may be construed by the adcomms as being flippant about the admissions process.
The topic u choose doesn’t have to be terribly profound or weighty. But chapstick is a fail.
@bjkmom I decided to cut the word addiction. It’s not worth the risk, and you adults obviously know more than me. (That wasn’t sarcasm. I was being genuine, but now that I read over my response it kind of sounded snarky. I’m sorry about that!)
@GMTplus7 I didn’t just talk about Chapstick, I introduced my essay with it, and then began to talk about how I wasnt breaking out of my comfort zone. I then talked about founding a very prominent newspaper in my school and breaking out of my comfort zone in that aspect.
With all that, do I still seem trivial/petty? Any more help would be greatly appreciated!!
EDIT: I decided to change my essay prompt to #4 as bjkmom suggested, so would that make a difference?
Hey guys, I’m back! I wrote the essay, and bjkmom read over it. I was just wondering if anyone else would like to read over it and critique it for me please?