<p>I worked in my uncle and father's beer factory and I wrote my common application essay about that. My teacher said it is a very dangerous topic and this could raise red flags. The title of my essay is " Beer kegs and the porter"; it describes the time I was a porter in that company to get money for my education. One of my essay readers also got shocked at the title at first because it is related to alcohol.
Moreover, I also want to write many essays about this topic because I want to make this to be a theme in my essay: An supplement about the flaws in management in the company, Another about how life was hard in the factory and a research paper about how to make beer. And I define my career job is to continue my father job.<br>
Should I continue with this idea? Is it extremely dangerous way to deal with this essay. Am I considered to be an advocate of alcohol and an anti-temperance. I learned about US History, and people seemed to have a hatred for Anti-temperance and Irish Catholicism.
Btw, I dont drink beer but I dont know to to say in my application and I am afraid that even I say about it, that minor detail will be missed. I also read some pages of an admission book called " A is for admission" and I see that a committee decide admission decision although don't read the application of a student ( only hear an admission officer read the application). So it is likely that the minor detail that I dont drink my be forgotten. I am likely to be denied by some Protestants?
I dont have my admission counselor who knows much about admission so if you have one, ask her/him about my situation for me please</p>
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<p>I don’t see the danger in it. Make it about hard work, family traditions, etc. and the beer/alcohol aspect becomes unimportant.</p>
<p>My teacher said I was likely to be rejected if you wrote anything about alcohol. Any flaws or red flags may cause rejection from Ivies</p>
<p>You are not talking about drinking or abusing it, merely making it in a perfectly legal, industrial facility. Certainly BYU or other religious schools would be put off, but that is a different matter. I personally like the title because of the double meaning of “porter.” </p>
<p>But what do I know.</p>
<p>So I need a senior who knows much about admission to read my essay, please</p>
<p>Whatever you write, be sure you use correct spelling and grammar in standard English.</p>
<p>I think it could be really interesting, since you have a lot of first-hand knowledge and experience.</p>
<p>Put the fact that you don’t drink right at the beginning of the essay. Your first sentence could be “For someone who has never drank a drop of alcohol in his life, I sure know a lot about beer.” Then transition to the anecdotes about hard work, your business ambitions, etc. I would also change the title to something more subdued. The term “Beer Kegs” evokes images of drunken college students and will set the wrong tone for your essay.</p>
<p>So religious schools dont like my essay?</p>
<p>i agree with college a team. start it off straight up with the fact that you dont drink. “If you smelled my clothes after work one day, you’d never guess that I’ve never had a drink in my life.” I dont know how accurate that is, but that type of idea.</p>
<p>I am in the same boat as the OP. My father owns a beer distributor, and I plan on writing my essay on the different kinds of people I met working there and how all the customers would treat me like their own son. My english teacher found no problem with it, is there? haha</p>
<p>So BYU and Georgetown dislike this kind of essay?</p>
<p>Georgetown wouldn’t have a problem with it, BYU would.</p>