Feedback for essay topic?

<p>Hey guys,
I am in the position that only my essay will make or break my application. I had a 2.8 GPA freshmen and sophomore year and then a 3.8 junior year. The course rigor was extremely difficult and this essay describes my experience with a clever metaphor. If you would like to read my essay(Common App #2), PM me. :)</p>

<p>I’ll be glad to read and critique it!</p>

<p>Just make sure to be yourself</p>