Feedback for my college essay?

<p>Hi yall,</p>

<p>I finished the 1st draft of my college essay, and I need some feedback. It took me like 1o hrs to complete coz I was constantly changing it...SO yeah, I finally came up with something, so will anybody willing to read it? thx!</p>

<p>Oh btw, I can't pm yet, so you will have to pm me first and then I can send it... Sorry, but thx</p>

<p>You can PM it to me – I’ll read it and respond</p>

<p>Thank you!! but I don’t have 15 posts yet, so I can’t pm. So can you pm me first an then Ill send the essay in the reply? sorry for the trouble…</p>

<p>Thank you!! but I don’t have 15 posts yet, so I can’t pm. So can you pm me first an then Ill send the essay in the reply? sorry for the trouble…</p>

<p>PM me once you have 15</p>

<p>I think you can PM me now I’ll read it :)</p>