Feedback on essay??

<p>Ok, I finally got a draft done for a personal response for Michigan State and i would like some feedback. It's will admit that it's probably not that great. My scores and everything shows I should be in with no problem, but I want to make sure it's at least ok. I don't even really know if it answers the question, since I don't really talk about my life experiences.
Also, it's about 422 words and they ask for 400, do you think that's alright??</p>

<p>The question was: Based on your life experiences, how do you anticipate contributing to the cultural life of Michigan State University?</p>

<p>I'll take a look. PM me.</p>

<p>I was at MSU for a week in May for a school event. It was awesome.</p>

<p>SPARTANS, WHAT IS YOUR PROFESSION?! HAHROO.</p>

<p>i'll read it.</p>