Feedback on my college essay?

<p>Hello(: </p>

<p>So I've written a draft for my college essay and would like to hear some opinions on it.
Let me know if you're interested in helping</p>

<p>Thank you in advance!</p>

<p>I’d be glad to help! Please let me know which college(s) the essay is intended for, though!</p>

<p>Yeah, that’s fine.</p>

<p>i’d like to read it.</p>

<p>I’d love to help</p>