Feedback on my first essay please

[ac33527]

<p>Can anyone read my essay and give me feedback on it?</p>

[historyworm95]

<p>Sure. PM me</p>

[indielove9]

<p>No problem!</p>

[UFEddy]

<p>I’ll read it!</p>

[maddsm]

<p>i’ll take a look for you, pm me it!</p>

[Doctorclumps]

<p>Sure thing! PM me</p>