Feedback on my PS/Chance me for UCLA, UCB,UCSD pls???

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<p>I'm a CC student applying this year for UCLA, UCB, UCSD with math/econ as my first major. though I participate in TAP, my current GPA is at borderline, so I put much stress on my personal statement. I heard UCLA, UCB read personal statement closely so hopefully it gonna increase my chance a little bit. I've finished the rough draft for both prompts, and I badly need feedback for my paper! If you have some free time to look at it, any comment would be much appreciate. A little bit too late to ask but maybe someone just come across my post on his/her boring day. Please comment below and I'll send you my ps. Thank you so much for reading my post!!!!</p>

<p><strong><em>Quick summary of two prompts</em></strong>
Prompt1: Write about my experiences with business since childhood, how I change my perspective to math/econ. Hold a management position in one company. how i apply this experience to open my own business. </p>

<p>Prompt 2: a narrative about being s an independent student. Struggle with poverty, new environment, bad decision. Work 40 hours/weeks, try to maintain education.</p>

<p>Not so much too tell but I'm giving my last shot. Deadline is coming so I hope to complete my application soon:)</p>

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<p><a href=“UC Transfers - College Confidential Forums”>http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/uc-transfers/&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p&gt;

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<p>@luckie1367 Thanks for the link! Are you a transfer student also? </p>

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<p>I am! I am applying this fall as well, so I don’t feel comfortable reading your essays! Good luck though!</p>

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<p>I will take a look! </p>

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<p>@luckie1367‌ Me either, though i’m dying to know what’s other applicants doing but i just can’t read their essays. Hope you do good on your application too!</p>

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<p>@bigdreamer54‌ Thank you! just quick question, are you applying this year too? sr i maybe too paranoid but i just dn’t want to send my essay to any current applicant. you know, this is sensitive time :expressionless: </p>

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<p>yeah I am applying this year too but not to UC my sister got into berekely so I thought she could help you out but if you are uncomfortable i understand </p>

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<p>@bigdreamer54‌ thank you! Yea I want some feedback but after reading some thread around here I get freaked out :frowning: Congrats to your sister! What major did she apply? Are you applying to ucb also?</p>