Feedback on my transfer essay?

College Essays
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<p>I have a first draft of sorts that I wrote tonight. I wasn't really sure how I should approach the transfer essay in light of the fact that I'm a community college student. If anyone would like to give feedback on my essay, leave a comment here and I'll message it to you. </p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>Anyone at all? :)</p>

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<p>Last bump. Still looking for help.</p>

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<p>I can help, but it might not be the best.</p>