<p>I think I am just about done with my essay. It is about my passion for sports and how Syracuse is the perfect fit for me. It is NOT one of those "big game" essays. If anyone wants to take a look and offer any final advice, it would be appreciated.</p>
<p>PM it to me … I’ll take a look at it and critique it!</p>
<p>anyone wanna help me out?</p>
<p>anyone wanna help me with my last revision?</p>
<p>Not applying to Syracuse…you can PM it to me if you want to…will be an honest critique</p>
<p>i tried and this came up:
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<p>any idea why?</p>
<p>Sure, PM it over :)</p>
<p>anyone wanna take a look. still waiting on a reply…</p>
<p>e-mail them to me instead of PM’ing</p>
<p>anyone else? still waiting on a reply</p>
<p>Hey , </p>
<p>I read your essay and it seems to be great. I would give a good impression to your AdCom . The essay’ shows that know a lot about sports and it is your passion (you are a true sports fan mate! ) . But I felt a few parts were exaggerating , esp the part when u tell how you were interested in sports (Its a bit cliche ) . </p>
<p>Considering your stats (which I read on your previous posts) and you essay , you will get into Syracuse ,if you have your Boss in Bridgeport send in a word or some letter ! and also put in a para saying I must get in to Syracuse because i am a hard worker and will improve and blah blah ( the act of faith might get you in) </p>
<p>Just my 2 cents.</p>
<p>Take care and thanks for sending in your essay and trusting me 
(be aware of essay thieves)</p>
<p>thanks i appreciate the look. i dont think anyone would steal this to be honest as its so personal and easy to check. its geared towards my major and school. ive got a letter from my boss. he has also put in personal phone calls for me. also im applying ed so that should say how much i want to get in along with my interview in october. i dont want to overdo it you know? it should be less about buttering than up and more about me which is how i think it is now. i may add in another couple sentences about the sport managment major at syracuse however. thanks again!</p>
<p>I’d like to read it. I have not read an essay yet about sports.</p>
<p>thanks…just shot ya a pm</p>