First attempt at a Why Penn essay. Need help!

College Essays
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<p>So I finished my first attempt at a Why Penn essay and I need reviewers, but a coupe things.</p>

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<li><p>The question enver says why penn. It says "What do I see myself pursuing at Penn." I took that to mean Why Penn but there are subtle differences. I'm not sure I answered the question fully.</p></li>
<li><p>I need to cut 100-200 words. Its 700 words as is and I need some help cutting down. Like really really need help. Fast responses would be so appreciated.</p></li>
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<p>Thank you.</p>

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<p>PM it to me</p>

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<p>Where are you applying wolfenarc? I’m a bit wear considering you’re a brand new user and your only posts have been to volunteer to read peoples essays.</p>

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<p>I can read, PM if you’d like.</p>

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<p>pm it to me
ill take a look and critique it overall and tell you if you should edit anything</p>

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<p>PM to me and I’ll give it a look.
Don’t worry, I am not applying to Penn.</p>

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<p>I’m a Wharton applicant, but if you’re applying to any of the other schools feel free to PM it.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it as well.</p>

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<p>I can read it as well!</p>

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<p>I’ll be applying to Penn SEAS, MIT, and Cal Tech among other schools so you can send it if you still want me to read it</p>

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<p>PM it over! I’m in college.</p>

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<p>You can PM it over if you’d like</p>

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<p>I’ll read 10 char</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look and suggest amendments to be made. PM it to me.</p>

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<p>Oh this person got a lot of people that wanted to read their essay. When I posted and asked could anyone read mine, no one offered :(</p>

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<p>Only like half the people responded. Should I be worried people stole my work, or are people just lazy?</p>

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<p>ill read it, PM it over</p>

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<p>Same here, Staller. I’d like to think that these CCers wanted to read to compare with their own essays more than critique it, although to be honest I’m a little unsettled - mostly because my settings for some reason didn’t let me store my Sent Messages for proof. :|</p>

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<p>I’ll read! PM me :)</p>