<p>constructive critiscism
areas to chop out
areas that could flow better</p>
<p>i'll PM you if you reply. thanksss.</p>
<p>ill edit yours if you do the same for me :)</p>
<p>sure, thing. i’ll PM you mine, and you can do the same.</p>
<p>constructive critiscism
areas to chop out
areas that could flow better</p>
<p>i'll PM you if you reply. thanksss.</p>
<p>ill edit yours if you do the same for me :)</p>
<p>sure, thing. i’ll PM you mine, and you can do the same.</p>