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<p>Essay Prompt
Nowadays nothing is private: our culture has become too confessional and self-expressive. People think that to hide one’s thoughts or feelings is to pretend not to have those thoughts or feelings. They assume that honesty requires one to express every inclination and impulse.
Adapted from J. David Velleman, “The Genesis of Shame”
Assignment
Should people make more of an effort to keep some things private? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>Every individual is entitled to their own privacy. It their duty to ensure that they maintain a safe distance from nosy neighbors or unwanted friends on Facebook who often try to make a havoc of their personal lives. Otherwise they can self invite peril, often unknowingly. It is not about shutting themselves from the world around or hiding important details, but it is about being able to decipher the fine line between privacy and publicity. It is a very fine line indeed! Hence,the statement "Should people make more of an effort to keep some things private? is true. Examples to prove this point are extensive and too many to delve into.
Firstly, well into the 21st century, scientific and technological advancements have enabled us to reach out to people across the globe, to explore ventures that seemed bleak 2 decades ago. The internet, a path breaking invention indeed, has almost become a part of our daily lives and so have social networking sites. By the latter, limiting out purview to Facebook only would be living in Fool’s Paradise! There’s the Snapchat, Instagram, Myspace, Youtube, Twitter and other no so noteworthy ones as well. These sites have transformed us into an open book for the masses to read and formulate their own conclusions, often prejudiced and well deviated from the original intention, sadly. Such sites also provide us with the freedom to express our views without any fetters with taglines like ‘what’s on your mind?’ ,but there are certainly some who go overboard with constant updates of their emotional outbursts or relationship statuses. Hence, it is essential that we keep certain details private and extend viewing accessibility of our pictures and posts to an immediate friend circle only if we wish to live a peaceful life, otherwise someone in some remote corner of the world could very well take advantage of our unwary naiveté and with their devious intentions turn our life into a social mess. Secondly, there have instances from literature when confiding in a supposed confidante has had violent repercussions. In the Bard of Avon’s Julius Caesar, tragic hero Marcus Brutus confides in Cassius, telling him about his concern for Rome and its people if Caesar was to continue as ruler. Not only did Brutus commit a flaw by sharing his thoughts with Cassius but also trusted someone to blindly with his inner emotional upheavals. Who knew that taking advantage of this Cassius would, on behalf of the other conspirators, write a letter to Brutus feigning to be the Roman masses to provoke him to take up their cause and thereby assassinate Caesar. This opens up another aspect of the above argument about choosing wisely about whom to trust and whom not to.</p>

<p>Further elucidating on the first point that although being a social butterfly might speak highly of one in the society and you may be the talk of the town but internally it is the sign of someone shallow. Hence, taking precautions is the mark of a wise one because every scientific invention has its bane and it turns out that the internet offers both: the boon and bane; we have to be careful enough to choose the former. Similarly human nature and their instincts should practice with precaution when its comes to trust and respecting one’s privacy.</p>

<p>My very first attempt at wrting a sat essay. Please score this anyone. Thank you!</p>

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<p>Could you please review mine too? Any constructive comment would be much appreciated. Thank you very much for your time in advance! :smile: </p>

<p>PROMPT: Do we need others to understand ourselves?</p>

<p>Besides wealth, power, success, and many other ideals, one thing that human kind thrives to attain is self-acknowledgement, or, in other words, the understanding of oneself. The journey to self-acknowledgement, however, is very unlikely to head in the right direction if one is to travel alone. To reach the desired destination, which is the most inner part of the soul, invisible even to oneself, one would need the help of others as well.</p>

<p>In the acclaimed novel by Sue Monk Kidd, “The Secret Life of Bees”, Kidd’s young protagonist – Lily Owens, found herself set out on a journey that, although was initiated by the desire to be closer to her deceased mother, would eventually lead her back to her own self, and free her from the guilt and sorrow that had been haunting ever since her mother’s death. However, she couldn’t have accomplished so without the help of several other characters. The detainment of Rosaleen, Lily’s black housekeeper, for standing up against racist white men who were abusing her, helped fuel Lily’s desire to escape from her tyrannical father, as busting Rosaleen out of jail became Lily’s excuse to run away from town and embark on a journey to retrace the past of her beloved mother Deborah. The fortunate encounter with August Boatwright, who used to be the caretaker of her mother as an adolescent, helped Lily learn more about her mother, whose maternal love she was denied and had always wanted. However, she also discovered two painful truths: that Deborah had abandoned her before her death, and that Lily herself was responsible for that very tragedy. These newly found truth along with her father treating her as no more than an indebted burden, Lily became much deterred and developed the idea that she was “unloveable”. Over the course of the novel, however, several people came along and helped save her from such a dark misconception. August and the Boatwright sisters not only provided Lily, who belonged to the race that had treated theirs as inferior beings, with a shelter, but also gifted her with a second family, with whom she could laugh while eating dinner, who made her sandwiches for lunch, who sang and danced with her in the water splash, and who, above all, told her she was loved. If it were not for Rosaleen, August, and the Boatwrights, Lily Owens would have probably never been able to overcome her guilt, but instead would have lived her entire life not knowing how to accept her flawed mother and father, and, above all, how to forgive herself and understand her own beauty.</p>

<p>As people interact with one another, brush each other both on the surface and the inside, they understand one another more and simultaneously understand their own inner selves. In other words, the understanding of others is essential and correspond to the understanding of oneself. While one is unable to see one’s flaws and virtues, others around him probably can. Therefore, an exchange of understanding with others would enable one access to such a view as well.</p>

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<p>Prompt: Does working with others lead to better results than acting as an individual? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>Essay: Often times many people are accomplished as individuals, achieving notable success or are distinguished among their communities. Upon closer inspection, one realizes that the individual gains such results not from isolated preparations but from a cooperative group effort. Humans, as a whole, function as unique individuals cohesively living together in a communal setting. The sharing of ideas and working collaboratively produces results that reflect a union of a variety of thoughts, knowledge, and opinions. However, one must remain grounded in his own beliefs and resist complete adaptation of one’s own thinking to mirror his ideas with others. A balance of individualistic creativity and group cooperation leads to a multi- faceted and well considered result that is many times better than an isolated one angled perspective.</p>

<p>Take the Seneca Falls Convention in the mid 1800s as an example. Outstanding individuals, Lucretia Mott, Susan B. Anthony, and Frederick Douglas were all attendees. Lucretia took a liberal standpoint, advocating for women’s rights to be fulfilled in the immediate present; Susan B. Anthony grounded herself in a less aggressive standpoint by encouraging subtle changes in individual homes that would gradually culminate into a society where women could act with the independence and freedom they deserved. Frederick Douglas took yet another view that women’s rights should be actuated along with the abolition movement for slavery to increase public awareness. The end result was a combined effort- aggressive literary promotion, small scale familial changes, and broad scope advocacy with the well- publicized abolition movement, that furthered the women’s rights movement more than any previous efforts. It was this combined effort and individualistic stance that produced the most effective results, one that was as varied as the movement itself.</p>

<p>Yet another example presents itself in present day society- the work of renown TV show producer Shonda Rhimes. A principal producer for many shows such as Grey’s Anatomy and Scandal, Shonda Rhimes develops her purpose and main theses for her shows and then expresses them to prospective directors, who through an integration of thoughts create a more diverse and complex meaning behind the shows. She meets with the actors and real life people the actors are portraying and after a big picture accumulation of all aspects of the show, she produces riveting, compelling, and relatable emotion- evoking shows that truly reflect the multi- perspective efforts of her work and the world portrayed through various points of view.</p>

<p>The community is simply a mixture of individuals and only when these individuals conjoin and actively share their beliefs and thoughts can a cohesive and well rounded community develop. Growth and maturity are defined by the ingredients of the people one meets, but the final product must be strained and refined to produce the best result.</p>

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<p>Prompt: Can success be disastrous?</p>

<p>Answer:
Some say that the end justifies any and all means, implying that any route to success is acceptable given that it achieves the desired end goal. However, after plowing ahead and achieving “success” the person may find that they are no happier than the started. Success can be disastrous when one doesn’t plan out the possible outcome of their actions and “isn’t careful what they wish for.” In many cases the person will realize that they were happier before, but that the process is now irreversible.</p>

<p>For example, in George Orwell’s novel Animal Farm, Snowball the pig thinks that converting the farm to a communist society will improve the farm animal’s work conditions. In the process of establishing an equal society, he fails to account for animal greed, and gets betrayed by his political partner. He accomplished his original goal of taking the farm away from it’s human owners, but as a result was banished from his own home, while life conditions for the animals declined below their original levels. </p>

<p>Animal Farm draws a parallel to many communist governments in the time it was written. During Stalin’s reign of communist Russia, he began with the intention of creating a peaceful society with equal incomes and shared property. The Russian people originally supported Stalin’s campaign, but as his government grew corrupt and strayed from its ideals, the people of Russia had no place to turn. The had succeed in bringing about a communist government, but had no way of escaping the cruel dictatorship it had become. This illustrates that what one wishes will happen is not always reflective of the actual end condition: in this case, success was disastrous.</p>

<p>In our modern society, people of all ages spend a big part of their lives engrossed with video games, TV, and the entire gamut of technological toys. Scientists have worked for decades to develop these products in order to advance human civilization, but in many cases, they are having the opposite effect. Children play video games instead of playing outside and developing social skills, teenagers sped all of their free hours staring at a screen displaying Netflix or Amazon Prime, and even adults consider social media to be more appealing than tangible conversation. Technology that had the intention of connecting our world didn’t succeed on many fronts, instead having the terrible effect of distancing people from each other.</p>

<p>Even those with the best intentions, “who propel themselves towards the achievement of one goal” can loose track of the desired end result and cause unwanted consequences. </p>

<p>Thanks! Not sure if this thread is still active, but it’s worth a try!</p>

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<p>Thank you for taking your time out to help all of us. I don’t know if you’re still doing this, but here is my essay.</p>

<p>Excerpt: “No great man lives in vain. The history of the world is but the biography of great men.”
Adapted from Thomas Carlyle, “The Hero as Divinity”
“In historic events, the so-called great men are labels giving names to events, and like labels they have but the smallest connection with the event itself.”
Adapted from Leo Tolstoy, War and Peace.</p>

<p>Prompt: Can the daily actions of average people have a significant impact on the course of history?</p>

<p>There is something that tells me that my test taking of today will greatly impact my future, and so will that bean burrito I ate earlier today. Ugh. Will either of those things greatly impact the course of world history? I don’t think so. The daily actions of average people cannot have a significant impact on the course of history. If it did, wouldn’t everyone be changing history? There are many things average people can do to impact the course of history, but they are also not daily activities. Leo Tolstoy, who is a not-so-average author, believes in this.</p>

<p>Did i brush my teeth today? Did i pick up my clothes off the floor? Do you care? Of course not, and neither does world history. These things are defined as daily actions of average people. Daily actions of mine will not decide the next great invention, nor will it decide the rise or fall of a great leader or economy. Last time I decided to buy a soda from a vending machine, I got a soda from the vending machine. That was it.</p>

<p>Many people would point to the casual littering of cigarettes in forests and car emissions that affect the environment significantly. Really? Is being in the forest a daily activity of average people? Does the weather affect the decision on gun control? These two are only examples but I believe that you understand the idea. We are looking at actions that are truly done daily by truly average people, and how it affects history, not science, even if indirectly.</p>

<p>“In historic events, the so-called great men are labels giving names to events, and like labels they have but the smallest connection with the event itself,” Leo Tolstoy once wrote in “War and Peace”. He analogizes that names are merely there to identify the event. This is so people can refer to it as the Ferguson shooting, the Watergate scandal, or the Delaware crossing.</p>

<p>In history, we do not see daily activities of average people affecting history significantly. We only see what we do to ourselves and close others.</p>

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<p>@Upless‌
I don’t have any actual sat essay experience but from the look of it you should try to avoid posing questions to the reader; an essay is different than giving a speech, and rhetorical questions or remarks do little to convince anything.
In general, it might be better to avoid including any personal beliefs in the essay.
Personal experiences can support an argument, but opinions cannot. I would recommend using examples from literature or history, and create a thesis focused on your view, not on the quote.
Overall score 3-5/12? This is my best guess.
Hope I helped.</p>

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Thank you for replying and I will remember you feedback .
I just hoped that your scoring and feedback would more closely follow the SAT scoring system.
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Prompt: Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority?

Essay:

People are always taught to respect people in authority, to make sure they are treated with the dignity they deserve, and to strive to stay in their good graces. However, what happens when that particular person in authority is wrong? Are people supposed to blindly go along with it, or does that situation represent a fatal flaw in the hierarchy of power and respect? In my opinion, it is crucial to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority because it is entirely possible that they are wrong.

I once walked into a classroom where I saw a sign hanging on the front door that outlined the rules for students in that class. It had the usual: ‘No food, No phones, No talking out of hand.’ but the very last rule surprised me. It said, ‘You will not question my skills and decisions as a teacher at any point during this class.’ I was shocked by this, because it was essentially encouraging students to blindly agree with everything the teacher put forward, and to quell any ideas or thoughts that may differ from those of the teacher. I thought then and I still think now that that must have made for a very hostile learning environment because the students were asked not to think for themselves, and that only leads to repressed emotions and consequently detrimental actions.

One very famous example of a time when people should have questioned the actions of someone in power was the Holocaust. Hitler was responsible for a genocide which claimed the lives of over 6 million people, and he had thousands of people carrying out his orders. We say today that those employees aren’t as much to blame as Hitler was, but the fact that they didn’t revolt in even the slightest way means that they were just as much to blame as Hitler was. If only the Germans had sat back and asked themselves whether they agreed with what Hitler was doing, many lives could have potentially been saved.

Eli Wiesel once said ‘Indifference is even worse than compliance - hatred is an emotion and indifference is the absence of it.’ If everyone were indifferent to political and social situations, no one would ever question the veracity of a certain law, system, or government, and unjust ones might never be changed. Change can only happen if someone asks for it, and in order to ask for it, people need to decide whether it is right or wrong by questioning it or the people in charge. So yes, people should question everything - from national laws to what time your parents tell you to go to bed, because there is always the possibility of the need for change.

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Please grade mine thank you :smile: highly appreciate it
Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority?

Nowadays, individualism is highly advocated in society and there has been a transgression from the control of only one or a group of leaders who makes every decision there is to a collective contribution of many individuals. There have been polarizing arguments regarding whether or not choices made by those in power should be revised or even refute. Opinions may vary, but from a personal standpoint questioning choices of officialdom plays a vital role in ameliorating the society, in a way that it helps eliminate fallacies and errors. To back up my point, I have substantiated a range of examples from history and literature, including the renowned short story the Giver by Lois Lowry and the revolution lead by Martin Luther King Jr, one of the greatest social activists in modern history.
The novel The Giver by Lois Lowry clearly depicts the effects one might have on the community by challenging the authority. The story sets context in a seemingly utopian society, where there is no suffering or pain. However, to be able to reach this state, individualism and creativity are deprived of the citizens unconsciously, along with all the memories in the previous eras. Jonas, the main character who is assigned to be the keeper of all those memories, discovers how a better life where people no longer live as human androids, can be achieved through the recovery of everyone’s memories. He risked his own life, broke many rules and left his community to accomplish this mission. The story ends with his goal fulfilled and this opened up more opportunities for development, on a both individual and social scale, than ever before. It is a short yet meaningful story which admonishes the readers to weigh all choices, even when they come from the more powerful force.
Another compelling archetype which also provokes this theme is the movement of Martin Luther King Jr in his years of being a social activist. Being born in an era where the black community is discriminated and alienated in America, King grew up to be a civil rights activist and organized myriad nonviolent protests to fight for equality and the abolishment of racism. These events attracted national attention and widespread news coverage. He was also the author of one of the most famous speech where he said with great fervor, on behalf of all African Americans: “I have a dream.” His outspoken predication to the government and to the people of America was a key factor that unlocked the chain of racism among black people.
To conclude, the conventional wisdom where all the decisions made by the authority never needs revising has been refuted by two epitomes above. Most of the time, those in power will make the most rational decisions for the good of the society. However, it does not mean that better outcomes can be achieved. This is why we should always consider those decisions.

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Hi guys can you please grade my essay. I took slightly more time than 25 minutes, about 2-4 minutes extra. Also is it necessary to use five paragraphs for 12? My tutor gives me only a six if i write four. Advice on how to write faster and feed back would be helpful. :slight_smile:
The topic is :Do our experiences from the past help us in the future?
I believe the past plays an eminent role in the present; it not only teaches educational experiences, but also values which we shall never forget, values for life. Failure and evolution, are the ultimate keys to success, but like everything else they too need time.
Back in the time before Christ, it as the Greek philosophers who debated about the composition of matter. Theories abounded, few of which were that matter was made of fire, ice, wind, and air, but all of these proved to be wrong. It was not until the seventeenth century, however, Mr. Dalton a celebrated chemist, had a hint of what matter was made of: tiny particles. Scientists carried this this theory forward, and began to propound many theories as to what atoms were made of, and this is still going on today. Starting from atoms, to protons, neutrons and electrons, there are now even more impossibly minuscule particles, such as quarks, and hadrons. This proves that science is purely based on time, scientists will never stop trying to break down the “matter” discovered by the philosophers, until science dies.
Even after the discovery of the atom and experiments, of reactions, chemists began to arrange these elements, just as we students arrange out notes. Primitive scientist arrange them by mass,however later Mr Dobereiner, began to group them into triads. Finally, Dimitri Mendeleev, known as the father of the periodic table found out that previous theories of octaves, were true for all elements, and all he did was arrange the elements in order satisfying all the theories of previous scientists. Dimitri really did not have to do anything major, all he did was study the work of previous scientists, and prove is right. If he is the father, then those scientists who were born before him were grandfathers! Now we enjoy the fruits of their labour and use it to discover even more patterns and elements. Past work is the fuel of today’s discovery.
Another example is a volcano in Montgomery. Initially people in Montgomery never thought of the dangers of the volcano, using it as a blessing instead of a curse. They enjoyed, the fertile and rich soil, the massive profits from sulphur, and tourist money from geysers and hot springs, hence taking the volcano as a blessing rather than a curse. However it was not until the volcano erupted did they realize the true power of it. Millions died, either by the flood of melted snow, or because they were scorched alive by the lava. Later however they learnt a valuable lessons, and now the police of Montgomery have set a restriction zone preventing people from going too close to the volcano, and setting up emergency rescue teams, and educating the public about precautions, and safety measures.
The past is every body’s driving force, but it also matters as to how we handle it. It is not failure that teaches us lessons or great people from the past, but truly, what truly matters is how we take failures, and what we learn from the people before us.

Thanks in advance!

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PLEASE, SOMEONE CHECK TO SEE IF THIS IS A GOOD ESSAY!!! ANSWER ASAP!!

“Everything comes if a man will only wait.” -Benjamin Disraeli, Tancred

“Destiny is not a matter of chance, it is a matter of choice; it is not a thing to be waited for, it is a thing to be achieved.” -WIlliam Jennings Bryan, Memoir

Assignment: Should we wait for good things to come, or is destiny not something we can wait for?

Essay

I believe that there is a plan for every person. A person wait for their destiny to be achieved. This means that we should learn to be patient for certain things to occur in our lives.

A personal example is that I do not know to whom I will end up being married to. It may be that I have crossed paths with my future husband in the past. I am usually a shy person, when guys talking to guys. Should I wait for destiny to place me in the perfect spot? Or should I I take the initiative to place myself in the perfect spot? Should I start courting a person right away? Or should I observe and wait before dedicating myself to this other person? What is I end up with the wrong person meant for me?

Most people do not know the person they will marry. It may be that a person could not wait to marry someone, and make the rash decision of marrying too soon. This may lead to a terrible life, and even divorce. Sometimes it is better to have patience. Everyone has a destiny. Perhaps waiting for the best husband possible would be the correct choice in life. It may be that that certain person was not meant for marriage. What we choose to do today affects what will occur tomorrow and in the future. Waiting could very well be what you will most appreciate in your future.

A famous quote is “Patience is a virtue.” Virtues are good, moral qualities to cultivate in your life. I believe people would suffer less in this world, if they would only exercise proper self-control. Wait for your destiny. Ultimately, the destiny for your life is the best plan there is. If something negative occurs in your life that you had not planned for, learn from it. Everything happens for a reason, and good, excellent things will come to those who wait.

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Prompt: Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority?

Questioning authority is vital to the Earth’s progress. If one is not to question something that is thought to be fact, we may not make as many advancements or develop as many new ideas.

For decades, the appropriate economic policy to handle recessions was a strict laissez-faire approach. Classical theorists believed wages and prices were fully flexible and the economy was self-correcting. However, British economist John Maynard Keynes challenged that approach. He claimed that wages and prices are fixed, and the government must increase spending in order to stimulate demand, and therefore lift the economy from recession.

In 1929, when the stock market crashed, classical economist claimed that the economy will eventually fix itself. In 1932, when FDR came into office, he saw that this laissez-faire approach was proving to be ineffective and therefore, turned to Keynes’s ideas. He put billions of dollars into federal works programs, and slowly but surely the economy began to improve. Had Keynes not challenged classic economic theory, we can only imagine how much longer and harder the Great Depression could have been.

Overall, Keynes is a classic example of why challenging authority is necessary. His theories proved to be successful, and he revolutionized the study of economics. Today, Keynsian economics is taught worldwide, for because Keynes challenged authority, society was able to pave the way to new and more efficient ideas.

Please anyone score this! thanks in advance :smile:

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Someone grade this for me please. Thanks in advance.

Assignment: Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?

Changes that make our lives easier do not necessarily make them better. Several literary works and studies have shown that changes that simplify our lives do not always produce better effects.

In his novel “Impact of Technology Today,” George Waldroph mentions how technology has facilitated our lives. However, George then mentions that this technology has brought about many harms, including cyberbullying and pornography. Thus, George believes that although technology is very beneficial to humankind, it also has its harms to the society abroad.

A couple of years ago, the principal of a school in Stonybrook amended one of the school policies, which stated that the students should wear a uniform when going to school. The principal, John Elder, thought that students would perform better if they were allowed to dress up in any type of attire they desire. However, after the policy was altered, the students began dressing up in inappropriate outfits, which led to many other bad actions. Therefore, John Elder had to return the policy to its original condition.

Jake Lander, a psychologist who studied how students’ scores are affected when given different test formats, wrote in his book “Proper Test Formats” that students should be given tests that have the same format because their brain cells will register that specific test format and allow them to achieve a great score. Jake Lander also mentioned that if the test format is altered, students may then get lower scores.

Technological advancements and policy and test amendments can often produce many harms. Hence, we should restrain ourselves from these changes that make our lives laborious.

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@rjr731‌ To begin with, your essay is pretty short. Usually top scoring essays are 5 paragraphs (Introduction, 3 body, and one conclusion). Overall, you had a strong introduction and the information you provided was good. However, you have to vary the examples that you’re giving, so that the reader does not keep reading about the same stuff. Also, you have to vary from using a literary work to a study and so on. There are also a bit of typos in your essay and some subject-verb disagreements. If I were to rate it out of 12, I would give it a score of 8.

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Thank you!

“What motivates people to change?”

The idea of having to change is frightening. We all feel comfortable with the way we are and if we don’t, we live with it or we make the change. We may know that we need to change something in our life, but finding the motivation is difficult. The only way that we truly do take those steps to change is through the power of said motivation. The hardest part of motivation is finding ours. I agree with Ward Sybouts when he says, “motivation comes from within.” My friends and family can’t make me change; I have to motivate myself and get into the mindset to make the change.

During my sophomore year of high school, I decided to take AP World History. I had always been bored in regular classes and decided to challenge myself. Having an AP class is NOT easy and I learned the hard way that I needed to make a change. Each week We worked on a different chapter along with homework and at the end of the week we would test on the chapter. I hadn’t adapted my life to the high workload so each week I only had part of the chapter read causing me to get low grades on each weekly test.

By the end of the first semester, I had never finished a whole chapter or homework assignment and got low grades on each test. Needless to say, I didn’t do so well. I received a “D” on my transcript. During the beginning of my second semester, I told myself to work harder, but I still didn’t have the motivation to work and change my terrible work ethic.

My teacher would offer words of wisdom and encourage me to work harder, but I never did. What happened to me first semester was repeating itself. My parents would get mad that my grade was slowly dropping and I was too. I could have taken control of my life and said that I needed to stay at school in the library and set up a schedule to help me do what needed to be done, but I didn’t. I know I had to change my bad habits.

At the end of the second semester, my grade was an “F.” I’m not proud of it. I needed to change, but I never found the motivation to do so. Everyone knows that there is something they can improve, but until they happen upon their personal motivation, the situation won’t be resolved.

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Someone grade this out of 12 please. Thanks in advance.

Assignment: Can success be disastrous?

Indeed success cannot be disastrous, for it is what has been produced by our efforts. Success is the key to living a good life and the source of prevention of harmful things. Several literary works such as “Succeeding in Business,” “Pleasing Life,” and “Living Gladly” reflect the idea that success will often lead to a better future.

In is book “Succeeding in Business,” Thomas Lancaster says that businesses will become powerful once they succeed. Thomas also says that as businesses succeed, they will gain more finance and productivity, which will lead to a life abundant with pleasure and satisfaction. Thomas’s ideas are also expressed relatively in another literary work.

In 1998, George Lancer produced his book “Pleasing Life.” This book articulated many ideas such as building up to success and maintaining that success. However, the key point or focus of this book is to explain and accentuate the merits of success. George says in his book that life without success is a piece of garbage; he also says that success in life will always produce more success, and that a person can never aquire success completely in life, due to the fact that a person will always have a different aspiration set in mind once he achieves one of his goals.

Many books express the benefits of success, but none does it as good as Menderic Clayton does. In his book “Living Gladly,” Menderic claims that success yields to many benefits such as happiness and satisfaction. Menderic states that happiness cannot be aquired fully until one has completely succeeded.

Hence, I believe that success cannot be catastrophic but rather be beneficial. Without success, our lives would be miserable. Success should be a person’s first and foremost priority in life, for it will enable him to live a gradually pleasant life without being harmed in any sort of manner. Surely, success is a key element in a person’s life, and without it, he would not be pleased with the continuum of his life.

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Assignment - Essay: Do we grow as individuals only by overcoming adversity?

Essay: People do grow as individuals only by overcoming adversity. The people who have accomplished the most in life have all dealt with some type of adversity. Nelson Mandela is one person who was locked up for years in prison and ended segregation in South Africa and both Stephen Hawking and Bethany Hamilton overcame a deabiltating injury/disease to reach the pinnacle of their field.

One very successful person that over came a lot of adversity is Nelson Mandela. He was kicked out of college originally for protesting colored rights at the University College of Fort. This didn’t stop him as he continued to protest with movement groups and was sentenced to life in prison for treason. He was then moved into solitary confinement for years after he had a prostate surgery. When he was finally released form prison due to groups he was a part of being unbanned he went tight back to fighting for his rights. In a few years after his release he earned the Nobel Peace prize for fighting for rights. The year after that he voted for the first time and became South Africas first elected president. Mandela overcame more adversity than people would in 100 life times but only benfited from it in the end.

Another person whose growth is supplemented by adversity is Stephen Hawking. He was a bright individual in England whose life was crushed by ALS. This deabilitating disease prevents him from walking and talking. Stephen continued his schooling despite this and came up with the most modern explanations in theororetical physics. He may not have been able to accomplish this if it weren’t for ALS because be used to party a lot, but the disease only allowed him to focus on his field of study.

Lastly, Bethany Hamilton is someone who had to overcome adversity that haped doing the thing she loved. Bethany is a surfer from Hawaii whose arm was lost if a shark attack. The attack didn’t stop her from doing what she loved and she grew to appretiate everything more. She wrote a book made for people dealing with depression. If it wasn’t for her adversity she would have never done that and many people say how the book benefited them greatly.

In conclusion people grow exponentially when faced with adversity, These people would not have accomplished what they did had they not experienced some issue in their life. They all went through things that changed their life and the used it as fuel.

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Promt:
History has shown us that liberty is not a guarenteed,natural possesion.The great landmarks of luberty,such as the american bill of rights and the emancipation proclaimation,were all gainned only through the sacrifice of many visionaries and patriots.we should be ever mindfull that freedom,if we are to preserve it,must be safegaurded with our lives.
adapted from bernard L.berzon

Assignment:
Do you belive that one should sacrifice life for lliberty?

Essay:
I belive that liberty is everyone’s right.Why not fight for something that truely belongs to you,even if it means sacrificeing your life.If we are to go down,might as well go down with a fight than be withheld by a bunch of autocrats.Ghandi,Mahathma Ghandi has instilled this will in every Indian’s heart.

The british initially came to India in the early 1600s in some form of proposal,by the beginning of the 1700s India was suppressed completly by the mighty british empire.Britishers ruled India for almost threehundred years,until Gandi,Muhammud Ali,Subhaas Chandra Bose,and a few other valient freedom fighters fought with utmost perseverence for our liberation.These legends brought together the entire nation including the musllims and the hindus together for the conquest in a variiety of non-violent protests,namely, non-coopertion monvement,the salt march,excetra.These retaliations had admittedly obliterated thousannd of Indians,the ‘jallian wala bagh’ massacre being the most trecherous.These conquests eventually lead to the death of many memorable and inspirational freedom fighter eventually Ghandi himself.

But,as a result of their dedication,vehmence and heart,India today is a democratic annd serene country.India will always have absolute reverence and homage for these legends.

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Could someone please grade essay post #336. I am anxious to hear constructive comments.

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Prompt: Is a perfect society possible or even desirable?

"A perfect society is impossible, or at the very least, not feasible because all humans are different and thus, hold different values and opinions which others may disagree upon. Such attempts to create an ideal society have been attempted in the past: the Ancient Greeks, the Romans and the convicts of the British have all tried to reorganize their diverse populations so that a “perfect” society could exist in harmony.

The Ancient Greeks strove to improve and even perfect their complex society, though their unprecedented measures failed to establish this perfect society which they envisaged. Pericles, a prominent statesman in Athens during the Golden Age, introduced a series of reforms which attempted to bring about social equality. These reforms of 464 B.C. allowed the Athenian citizens to vote on new legislation. Pericles was the first to introduce direct democracy which aimed to create a harmonious society. While the perfect society was able to maintain itself of a short period of time, it inevitably collapsed as a result of revolts and wars, such as the Helot Revolt and the Peloponnesian War. These conflicts results as the citizens demanded even further equality – something which the aristocrats were reluctant to abide by. Therefore, while Pericles may have established a very short period of near-perfection in a society, due to the conflicting perspectives of the citizens and aristocrats, his ideal society fell.

The Romans also attempted to stabilize and perfect their Republican society. Sulla, a notorious Roman dictator, shifted the majority of the power to the aristocratic senate, in hope that the well-educated and wealthy people of Rome would be able to govern the Roman Republic in an appropriate manner. While Sulla might have had benevolent intentions (that is, to establish peace under the leadership of the educated citizens), his plan to create a perfect society failed. Plutarch describes the dissatisfaction of the plebeians how were angered by their lack of influence in the Roman government. The aristocrats of Rome, the patricians, introduced legislation that was antithesis to the values held by the plebeians. Such legislation included a fixed price on corn, which the plebeians disagreed with as there would no longer be a competitive market. Due to the disagreements between the patricians and plebeians, Sulla’s reforms which aimed to establish a perfect society did not succeed.

When the first convicts from Britain arrived in Australia, they attempted to reinvent themselves and their surrounds so that they could live in a place free of sins. In 1788, Captain James Cook arrived in his ship, “Endeavor,” and brought with him criminals who had committed petty crimes such as stealing bread. Once they had landed in Sydney Cove, they were met by the indigenous people of Australia. While the convicts attempted to live in peace with the Aboriginals, within the first few months, conflict arose as a result of the significant differences in their culture. The Aboriginals regularly but unintentionally stole from the properties of the convicts, believing that the convicts also valued “cooperation” and “sharing.” Disgusted by the behaviour of the Aboriginals, the convicts retaliated and killed approximately ten thousand Aboriginals simply because they had unknowingly stolen goods such as fruit. Therefore, it is evident that due to the variance in values of the convicts and the Aboriginals, a peaceful and perfect society could not have been established.

Through a thoughtful analysis of the Ancient Greek, Roman and early Australian societies, it is clear that “perfect” societies simply cannot exist due to the difference in values of different types of people."

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