<p>I received a 6 total, 3 from each grader.</p>
<p>I’m really not qualified to give SAT essay grades, I’m not even all that sure what to look for. Perhaps, one thing to look at is connect your examples more explicitly to the prompt, and watch your mechanical errors.</p>
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<p>I count 3 grammatical errors in the above selection; “supposedly world”; “supposedly drama”; “insights on.” There are more, just watch how you’re using words.</p>
<p>@donnykim</p>
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<p>I am a male. Everything else is correct.</p>
<p>HAHAHAHAHAHAHA… well energia ( HE :P) is reaally good seriously… I dunno what went wrong… maybe you should try to fill the two pages next time… and read essays that got a 6 (per grader ;P)… I would share with ya mine that got a nine… But it isn’t half as good… seriously… Was this in January 2013?! because maybe the graders thought it was some template cuz even many of ma friends got sucky grades with amazing essays that were “templated”… weird thing is yours doesn’t look so… hmmm… anyway… Just try to read the 12 essays and pepare as many “universal” examples as possible</p>
<p>Well I was at first shocked that the grader would give a 12 for something that short (no offenses) and I read it like 5 times to see what did you do so perfectly.</p>
<p>And thank you donnykim! That introduction is absolutely beautiful. lol</p>
<p>Gotta work on dat grammar. Haha.</p>
<p>The only persuasive part of you essays will be how you open and close … the middle is just filler - but just make sure it is not so bad that it starts to detract from the overall impression the reader gets right off the bat. The essays I am seeing on this thread have trite intros at best.</p>
<p>“Every great work of art, every song, every scientific achievement, and indeed, the entirety of modern civilization” - (yawning)
@energia - don’t generalize so much</p>
<p>You know they take only a minute to grade your essay right? So if you don’t pazzazz the graders in the opening they are “asleep” through the rest.</p>
<p>“Books should portray the world as it is because they allow children to cope with the real world better. Throughout readings, I, as well as other young readers, imagines a world with full of secret passages. But these secret passages disappear after I close the book. Several examples that show the importance of authors to “tell it like it is” can be demonstrated through experiences and film.”</p>
<p>@kimmylouie - you gave up your punch line right in the beginning. It is a good thesis but you should have closed your intro with it after talking about the greater context of the problem… depression, introversion, emotional intelligence. Why coping skills matter in this complex world of ours…</p>
<p>JBL</p>