Freshman Application - Essay Vs. Short Answer

<p>My daughter wrote her essay about theatre and how it contributed to her personal growth. Theatre is her passion! She has performed since she was in 4th grade and volunteered at the theatre many hours, 700+, while in high school.</p>

<p>Now she is wondering if it would be ok to write about theatre, in her short answer; theatre as an activity that is important to her and why? She spends the majority of the evenings at the theatre, so that is where her time goes; she also loves horses and volunteered at a city park for 3 summers, but the majority of her time has been spent at the theatre.</p>

<p>Your input is greatly appreciated.</p>

<p>I used the short answer portion as a chance to break from my main "hook" and talk about something else I did outside of school.</p>

<p>My long essay was about an experience I had working for my high school newspaper (I'm a journalism major), and then I talked a bit about volunteering in the short answer section. </p>

<p>If she's applying for a theater major and the long essay already shows her love of the field, I feel like the admissions officer would be interested in seeing a different side or passion later in the application. A second piece about theater might be redundant.</p>

<p>Wow, that is a tough one. As i was reading your post, i was forming the answer in my head. I will give you my first response, first (and then a second thought, after the first response). </p>

<p>My son's Senior English teacher (was one of a few people who) read his Essay. I thought the intial essay was a good essay. Similar to Theatre for your daughter, my son's passion is music and guitars. She handed the Essay back to him, and (since you knew him really well) she told him "make some changes so that I can better sense your passion". He did a few re-writes, and the final version was something to behold. His papers are always good for classes, in the typical term paper format. This Essay really jumped out at you, when you read it. My point in all this? This Senior English teacher who has several years worth of experience with helping seniors apply, and get accepted into the most competitive universities in the country, probably knows of what she speaks. For you, and your daughter, I say Go for it. If Theatre is her passion, then pour it on. Let the short answer be about Theatre as well. (In one of my son's short answer questions, he wrote again, about his passion for Music and Guitar). </p>

<p>With that said.... my son also had many many hours of community service (not horses, but a national disease organization, like Heart Association, but a different one). Anyway, he was quite involved in working with the Agency, in fundraisers and other assistance. He did include this in his application as well. It may have come in the Activities section. My point here? We think USC also likes community service. (In reality, we have no idea what they really like or look for, since we only know that he applied, and was accepted, and we will never know what they liked or did not like in his application. I will add that he received one of the Merit Scholarships for 1/2 tuition, so they seemed to really like the information that he presented to them.). </p>

<p>In summary, I would probably still recommend her going with the passion for theatre over the volunteer work, in the essay and the short answer question. However, be sure to include the volunteer work in the Activities section.</p>

<p>Good luck to your daughter. If she has not already, have her show the essay to a couple of teachers (of different subjects) who she values their opinion. If they give responses, the response should not tell her what to write, but instead should be in a general area (make it more concise, make it more exciting, emphasize that point more, etc, without telling her what words or sentences to write. It should be her paper, but all college readers and guidance counselors would agree that general feedback is always a good thing. The teachers, in my opinion, should be people that your daughter really trusts their opinion. And, she should use her gut feeling in the end, to determine whether or not to make any final changes.</p>

<p>Thank you Lovetocamp and Ned5555. Looks like my D is running out of theatre ideas to write in her essays. The essay for the main application is about theatre. She is applying to the School of Theatre, so she needs to write a second essay about theatre. I think her short answer is going to be about her love for horses.</p>

<p>i'd say you really shouldn't do that..they need to see that you're well-rounded
for example, this is what i wrote about</p>

<p>Short answers:
playing ping-pong and jobshadowing/interning</p>

<p>Main essay:
an event in china (however that was a long time ago..meh it's kinda iffy, and i'm still trying to chug it out now lol)</p>

<p>for the first essay, can I write about how Ap Bio and my curiosity for biology helped me grow?</p>