<p>I'm looking to get opinions of my personal statement as a transfer student, my GPA is lower than the requirements needed and I am trying to make it up with my personal statement.</p>
<p>I cannot edit my original post for some reason, but my thoughts of it are that it is a little too generic. It has a little humor and a few parts very descriptive but I just don’t know what to think of it as a whole. My sister told me its good, but I think she’s just being my sister.</p>
<p>Its only 5 paragraphs, just slightly under 2 pages. I’m desperate for outside criticism</p>
<p>I’ll read yours and give you my opinion if you do the same for me. I don’t need any tips on grammar or proof reading, but actually improving the essay and its message, if that makes sense. PM me with your essay and I’ll pm you with mine after. And please, my essay is due in a couple days so please don’t take a week to do it lol.</p>
<p>I’d be happy to review it if you want to PM me.</p>
<p>I’ve got time, I’ll give you feedback if you’d like.</p>