Grade my essay out of 12 please?

<p>Hey guys, please do me a huge favor of grading my essay and giving feedbacks. Thanks :) </p>

<p>Assignment: What are your thoughts on the idea that failure is necessary for education to take place?</p>

<p>Essay: </p>

<p>Failure to some people is the biggest adversity, therefore their zeal to recover from their mistakes is more than before. For anyone who has gone through learning and failing would agree with John Hersey's quote, "Learning starts with failure; the first failure is the beginning of education". For people who truly appreciate who they've become today couldn't have achieved what they have without failing at least once. </p>

<p>In Ben Carson's novel "Gifted Hands", the theme of overcoming failure due to me learning occurs again and again. In the opening chapter, it starts with Ben being raised in a state of adversity but luckily he got into school. Then the hopes of getting a scholarship set in. He failed his first year examination terribly. After this, he was more determined to pass the next examinations; not only to pass it,but to have the best results in his set. So he began to revise with his professors using his previous scripts ad extra books from the library. By the time the next results were out, he had made the highest score and had been awarded the scholarship.</p>

<p>The second phase of the book opens with him going into medicine school. He had gone into the school being the best student academically in his previous school, but this school had exceptionally smart students from all over the world. Also being the youngest, he was faced with a number of challenges. He failed several examinations, mostly in the practical aspects. Due to this, he began to learn from his mistakes by looking at some of his other course mates during work, then tried attempting it himself. There was a tremendous increase in his scores and he also became one of the best in the school.</p>

<p>Finally, at the final chapters of the book, he reveals how he was successful at separating conjoined twins. That wouldn't have been possible if he hadn't learnt from his previous mistakes. His life story does summarize the theme that failure is indeed necessary for education to take place. </p>

<p>8 or 9.</p>

<p>Increase length to about 400 words for higher score.</p>

<p>I can’t give you much advice as you have adopted an eccentric and a risky approach to your essay. The grader may love it or hate it. There’s no in-between.</p>

<p>Thank you so much :)</p>

<p>The quote seems very specific for the prompt. WIll you be able to use similar quotes for future prompts? If not, I’m not sure of the pint in using it in your practice essay.</p>

<p>Thank you. What grade would you give me?</p>

<p>I’d give you a 9. Just increase the length of the essay & you’ll get a 10+</p>