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<p>Prompt: Should heroes be defined as people who say what they think when we ourselves lack the courage to say it? Plan and write an essay...</p>

<p>Heroism is having the courage to stand up and say what others won't. Many of the people who lived as heroes had the bravery to stand up for what they believed, and therefore helped change the world. This can be supported by many events and people in both history and literature.</p>

<p>Mahatma Gandhi, born on October 2, 1869, is regarded as a hero throughout the world. Gandhi lived through a time where India was controlled by the British. Although Britain placed harsh laws on India, no one from India had the courage to stand up for him or herself, or India as a whole. However, this ended when Gandhi had enough of the unfairness of the British control, and decided it was time to emancipate from Britain. Through his brave tactics, such as peaceful rebellions, and hunger strikes, Gandhi helped India become independent from Britain. Thus, since Gandhi is known as a hero throughout the world, it is clear that his heroism is a result of his courage, bravery, and ability to stand up for himself and country when no one else would.</p>

<p>In the novel, To Kill a Mockingbird, by Harper Lee, Atticus Finch was a hero. Atticus was a man who stood up for what he believed in, no matter what others thought. This is shown when he accepts to defend Tom Robinson's case even though Tom Robinson was black. This shows bravery by Atticus because he knows accepting to defend Tom Robinson would change not only his life, but also his children's lives for the worse. However, since Atticus always stands up for what he believes in, which is that everyone deserves a fair case, no matter their background, he is the only person with enough courage to stand up for Tom Robinson. Because of his courage and bravery, Atticus Finch is known to be a hero.</p>

<p>After analyzing the actions of both Gandhi and Atticus Finch, it is clear that in order to be a hero, one needs to be brave and courageous. If one is unable to stand up for what he or she believes, it will not be possible to be characterized as a hero.</p>

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<li> Mostly because you do not answer the prompt. First example about Gandhi is good but why do I care when he was born? That, though minor, is a distraction that detracts from the overall quality of the essay. Second example is bad. Atticus does not know how his children will be affected by him taking the case, and the second example says nothing about saying what he thinks when we lack the courage to say it. Make sure to compare these people to contemporaries who thought similarly but did not act on their thoughts. The ending also does not refer back to the question. You talk about being courageous and brave to be a hero, but not about words.
Good writing though!</li>
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<p>yeah a solid 8 you kinda deviate from the prompt. you don’t have to try too hard to get a 10 though</p>