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<p>Topic: Should facts sometimes be ignored?</p>

<p>Essay:
The great Albert Einstein once said, “If the facts don’t fit the theory, change the facts.” Though this statement might hint more of a rebellious tone towards the intellectual society, it is considered to be quite right. Evident in history, this phenomenon can be explained in part by the rule of the Greeks as well as the constant conflict between Galileo and the Pope of that time.</p>

<p>During the time when the Greek Empire was, loosely speaking, the primary body of civilization, many theories were accumulated about how the world and, in turn, the universe functioned. Since these were the only plausible explanations of the time, and being simple-minded back then, the people adopted these conjectures into facts. One of these so called “facts” was the theory on the makeup of all things (earth, fire, air, and water made all things). As time progressed, scientists disregarded these “facts” and went on to the actual deciphering of the makeup of the world (which, in actuality, were atoms). By ignoring what was previously thought to be factual, the scientists’ theories, which were quite different than the “facts,” established a doctrine explaining the true composition of all things.</p>

<p>Another explanation of the phenomenon as aforementioned was clear during the time of Galileo. The Pope, quite the influential person being the highest level of the Catholic hierarchy, established theories, which, like before, became “facts” by the people. Galileo sought to disprove these “facts” through his own theories regarding astronomy, physics, and mathematics. Also called the Father of Astronomy, Galileo, by implementing his theories in experiments and proving them to be correct, redefined the views of the people, not of that generation, but the next. </p>

<p>Galileo’s conflict with the Pope as well as the Greek’s “innocent” understanding of the world prove that Einstein’s “theory of facts,” per se, was actually correct. Einstein himself was a victim of his own theory, establishing quite the number of theories explaining the concepts of real life. For the world to advance, facts must be ignored at times, and rising theories must be given a chance to be verified.</p>

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<p>i'd say at least a 10, and probably a 12.</p>

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<p>Thanks a lot, IceFire!</p>

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<p>do answer the question in the first para. i feel that your examples are not persuasive enough. always go back to the point you are trying to make -- We should ignore facts sometimes, because bla bla can progress in science. you have not done this enough. anyway, i don't mean to be hostile, but the question was saying 'should facts sometimes be ignored?' yet your examples were more of widely believed 'facts' that were not truly established at the time they were 'ignored'. </p>

<p>one example of a fact that should be ignored could be, say, the fact that william hung couldn't sing. but william hung got famous through singing, appearing on american idol and making a few albums because he refused to believe that he couldn't sing though it is FACT. hahahaha lame example but justifies my point right? doubt your could use that in your essay but just think along those lines. how about pretending this example's from a book. haha</p>

<p>that being said, i'm going to give you a 9/10. i'm harsh though.</p>

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<p>that's still good, thanks for the advice dude!</p>

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<p>I think its good. Remember to never start a paragraph with "another example/explanation", it makes you sound like a confused 8 year old. Ill give you a 11.5</p>

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<p>Thanks guys!</p>