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<p>Assignment: Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in authority?</p>

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I accept every comment regarding the essay, I know it's bad so I don't expect much </p>

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<p>In a world where evil always prevails, I say it's necessary to question the decisions of the authority. If otherwise, They're left to be, Anarchy and Chaos will spread.
A Good Example Of this is Adolph Hitler, Hitler was born in 1923, He grew up without a father and mother and later on with his life he became the President of Germany, During his era,
No one stood for what he believed in. Thus, Censorship was extreme and covered all aspects of life including art, Films and Radio. Trade Unions were suppressed and replaced with the "Labour Front" , Which didn't actually function as a trade union. The churches were persecuted, All youth associations were abolished and re-formed as a single entity as the Hitler Youth organization, The Jewish population was increasingly persecuted and isolated from society and under the Nuremburg Laws of September 1935 Jews were no longer considered to be German citizens and therefore no longer had any legal rights. Jews were no longer allowed to hold public office, not allowed to work in the civil-service, the media, farming, teaching, the stock exchange and eventually barred from practicing law or medicine. Hostility towards Jews from other Germans was encouraged and even shops began to deny entry to Jews. Workers were low paid and their freedom to move between jobs was increasingly restricted. Even the workers' recreation time was strictly controlled through the "Strength Through Joy" organisation. Hitler was the law when it came to the judicial system and had the ultimate say over legal actions of any kind. Adolph Hitler's urges could have been put to an end before he gained power If someone would have questioned his authority and his decisions, Racism and anarchy would not have spread. This Proves that questioning authority and their decisions is an absolute necessity to achieve a peaceful living.</p>

<p>I’d say that you’ve got some good ideas, but you’re not necessarily following grammar rules. Like you might want to look over run-on sentences and stuff like that. Another thing, from what I’ve heard, it’s better if you write more than one example (3 is best) for SAT essays; although I can appreciate how you much you expanded upon your hitler example and used it to reinforce your argument.</p>

<p>Do I have to write more than one example? Can’t I just write a long one example? and I also heard that instead of writing examples I can write a long personal anecdote but it has to be good.</p>