Grade my Sat essay please??

<p>The old saying, “be careful what you wish for,” may be an appropriate warning. The drive to achieve a particular goal can dangerously narrow one’s perspective and encourage the fantasy that success in one endeavor will solve all of life’s difficulties. In fact, success can sometimes have unexpected consequences. Those who propel themselves toward the achievement of one goal often find that their lives are worse once “success” is achieved than they were before. Assignment: Can success be disastrous? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>can you please tell my mark and what do i lack?</p>

<p>"Never Give up! Failure and Rejection are only the first step of succeeding." Although a success can have sometimes negative effects, it will always be a great achievement in your life.</p>

<p>Many great people faced many difficulties and hindrances until they successfully achieved their motives. Such people are Walt Disney and Sir Isaac Newton. Walt Disney was ridiculed by his teacher and fired from his job as a magazine writer because they claimed that he lacked imagination. However, Disney neglected the grown up's words and built the most amazing yet imaginary amusement park in the universe. Now, thousands of children are enamoured with his vivacious characters. Another person would be Sir Isaac Newton who wasn't really clever during his academic years. His teachers also complained for his lack of concern and poor grades; however, Newton like Disney didn't care what people thought about him and worked hard trying to figure how the universe worked. Now, Newton's laws are fundamentals because they explain how objects behave in space, and without Newton, we'll still be lighting candles to study!</p>

<p>As a result, success will always lead to a life full of happiness and satisfaction. "Fall out seven times, stand up eight !"</p>

<p>You need a lot of punctuation. I’d give it a 3. Solid examples, but not so great flow of ideas and structure.</p>