<p>Hey guys! I don't post here often, but I was hoping someone would be willing to grade my essay. I spent ~6 minutes on the intro and body I have written mostly due to time constraints due to real life, so if you are going to give me a 1-6 grade, try imagining a second body paragraph and conclusion of equal quality.</p>
<p>In order to better understand ourselves, we need to understand others, as well. Several key examples of this include Frank Herbert's Dune and {insert second example.}
In Dune, the protagonist Paul Atreidis finds himself on a barren planet that is inhabited by the Fremen, a large and scattered group of desert people. At first, he is extremely wary and distances himself from them, but as his situation becomes clearer, he, as the heir to a royal throne, begins to understand the Fremen lifestyle. This ultimately brings him to a clearer understanding, both of his current life and of his destiny to become the mythical hero of the Fremen whose destiny is to return the planet to its lush past state. Instead of keeping to himself and avoiding the strange people, Paul tries to understand where the Fremen come from and why they act the way they do. This brings him to a state of mind similar to that of Nirvana, which was a major motivation of Frank Herbert while writing this novel.</p>
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<p>How should I go about shortening my novel summary and expanding the "meat" of the paragraph?</p>