<p>"The pool threatens that its water is colder than the cold morning air..."</p>
<p>Okay I already know that the water cannot be compared to the morning air, but I don't know how to word it without it ... being wordy. Any help?</p>
<p>I was thinking something like "the pool threatens that the temperature of its water is colder than the temperature of the morning air." No?</p>
<p>Any and all help is appreciated!</p>
<p>"The pool threatens that its water is colder than its frigid, morning air alternative"? But, um, rephrased to sound better maybe? Yeah... At least now you are comparing two things of the pool...</p>
<p>Hm that seems good. Any other alternatives?</p>
<p>You probably didn't mean more suggestions from me, but...</p>
<p>First, I don't like my choice of "alternative." </p>
<p>Second, I have some random ideas:</p>
<p>"The pool threatens that, at daybreak, its water is colder than its frigid air counterpart"</p>
<p>"The pool threatens that, at daybreak, its water is more frigid than its air counterpart hovering before the dawn"</p>
<p>"The pool threatens that its morning water is more frigid than its air counterpart"</p>
<p>"The pool threatens that its dawn-kissed water is more frigid than its air counterpart"</p>
<p>"The pool threatens that its dawn-kissed water rips more shivers and goosebump-rubbing than its cloud-spattered counterpart" <-- went a little crazy on this one lol</p>
<p>Maybe not counterpart either... Check synonyms. You can obviously also mix and match with some of these.</p>
<p>Let's keep it simple:
The pool water threatens to be colder than the still frigid morning air.</p>
<p>Or fancier:
The pool's rippling water promises to be more frigid than the morning air, already chilling me to the bone.</p>
<p>"chilling to the bone" is a super clich</p>
<p>@KellMill: Isn't that similar to my original sentence or is it somehow different? :O</p>
<p>Thanks guys, more suggestions would be awesome!</p>
<p>KellMill is right and has a better version. "In the early morning, the pool water threatens to be colder than the air."</p>
<p>@ EnglishTeacher88: How is it different from mine? </p>
<p>"The pool threatens that [the pool] water is colder than the cold morning air..."
vs.
"In the early morning, the pool water threatens to be colder than the air."</p>
<p>Does "is colder than" vs. "to be colder than" really make that much of a difference?</p>
<p>Thanks guys! I fixed that part of my essay!</p>
<p>Best of luck to all!</p>