Hello, please read my essay?

<p>I don't know how to write an personal essay, this is a TRANSFER personal statement. Please tell me what I'm doing wrong and what I'm doing right? I haven't quite finished yet but I wanted to see some insight first before going ahead. Please tell me what I should avoid doing as well. I have yet to grammar check it etc. I'm a terrible writer but please help me..</p>

<p>The prompt : </p>

<p>Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.</p>

<p>I can PM to you ._.;; Thank you ( My essay is embarassing. Lol.. )</p>

<p>Thank you very much.</p>

<p>PM it to me! :D</p>

<p>I can read it (:</p>