I’m currently in the process of applying for a criminal justice major. To be admitted into the Criminal Justice program you need to have a 3.2 GPA and a B or above in 4 specific classes. Right now, I have a overall 3.0 GPA and a B or above in 3/4 classes and a C in 1 of them. The program allows you to write an essay if you want to apply for a Criminal Justice major and don’t meet all the requirements. I was wondering if anyone would be able to critique my essay, or if you’ve been in my situation before can help me with writing this essay. Thank you.
Essay:(2 page maximum, not finished yet)
Criminal Justice Application Major Essay
I never thought i’d witness a friend being stabbed in front of me, unfortunately I was brutally mistaken. Altercations with some neighborhood locals and my friends arose right on XXXt in downtown XXX fall semester 2015. Apparently these locals entered our party unwelcomed and weren’t able to properly accept leaving. A fight eventually broke out. I’d never been involved in an actual fight before, for I had always been a conflict avoider by trying to maintain peaceful vibes. Well this conflict was unavoidable because punches began being thrown instantly among the two parties involved. To make a long story short, I froze up and felt as if I physically was not able to move due to how tensed my body was. I eventually witnessed my good friend Vinny get sliced in the eye with a pair of scissors before the fight concluded. The unpleasant image of the blood that coated his face has plagued my mind, but the regret that haunts me from not interfering is just as painful. I was ashamed of myself, my coward like conscious prevented me from potentially saving my friend. Could I have I prevented this if I interferred? My denial tells me that I could of been stabbed myself and how my involvement was the proper course of action. Well that denial eventually faded and evolved into a sense of motivation. I wanted to punish the stabber of my friend, but realized that I was unlikely to find him. The scar on Vinny’s eye was a consistently damaging my sensibility and I desired a way to cope with the situation. A justice seeking mentality had formed amongst my daily thoughts as time continued on from the incident. If I sincerely wanted to prevent events such as the stabbing and contribute safety for the good of society, I had to find a legally accepted path to follow in order to do so. Being apart of the Criminal Justice system would allow me to not necessarily avenge my friend, but grant me the opportunity of preventing such situations from happening in the first place. I never want to feel as pathetic and coward like as I did that fateful night of the stabbing. My father always told me that I had an act for getting involved in situations that didn’t involve me, constantly trying to resolve conflicts that weren’t even significant to my wellbeing. I want to use this conflict resolving attitude for a greater good, and refuse to ever allow myself to freeze up how I had before Vinny was stabbed. My desire to join the justice system may seem ironic after my stress physically restricting me from getting involved in the stabbing, but that night significantly altered who I am as a person.