Help. In the midst of writting college essay!

<p>Ok. So i'm in the process of doing college applications. I'm using the common app. And i decided to write my essay on my grandma's death. Is anyone able to read it and critique it for me. It is such a generic topic. let me know if I should just write something else.</p>

<p>P.S. I'm new here and not really sure how this site works. but i hope someone can help me!!</p>