Help me cut down my commonapp essay! Will help back!

<p>I don't want to post it publicly so I could PM it to you or send it to your email....
I really feel like the essay could be shortened but I don't know how....
HELP IS NICE.</p>

<p>please send me yours i’ll send you mime my e-mail is janethm90@**********</p>

<p>not asking for it but if its around 600 - 700 words I’d send it. doesn’t have to be exactly 500</p>

<p>Send it to me, if you’d like. I can help you. Would you be willing to look over one of my short supplemental essays in exchange?</p>