Help me get a scholarship, please!

<p>No? I’m going to community college and the scholarships are for anyone. I’m getting aid. I’m transferring to a public school in January. This has all been worked out. I know what I’m doing. I’m not devastatingly poor; I should have been more clear. I just want a scholarship and I want someone to give me feedback on the essay. </p>

<p>I graduated in 2011. I went part-time at my community college in the fall, then took a semester off to travel. So technically I still am a freshman, but I took a bunch of APs in high school, so I’m not entirely sure. I’m going to get that all worked out. I just want feedback on the essay.</p>