Help me out in my Essay

<p>I'll PM it to anyone who is willing to critique and give me good feed backss.
thanks</p>

<p>I’d be glad too =D</p>

<p>^*to</p>

<p>will do. I’m kinda brutal though. And, uh, the above poster might not be your best bet XD</p>

<p>I can proofread it!</p>

<p>I’ll read it if you still need it!</p>