Help! My essay is boring =(

<p>Well I have finished my uncommon app essay and I am hoping to get a couple of opinions before i send it off. I feel that it is somewhat boring and I want to make it stand out more to the admissions officers. I would greatly appreciate any help.
Thank You</p>

<p>I am really down for reading an essay. PM it to me!</p>

<p>I would like to personally thanks Giantredlobster and snipez90 for helping me out and giving me great advice with my essay. However, with the deadline approaching soon, I would still like a few more opinions to help me round off my essay. </p>

<p>Anybody want to take a look?</p>

<p>Sure I'll do it</p>

<p>i can look if you want</p>

<p>I already PMd you, I would happily take a look. It will help me contextualize the kind of responses Uchi gets to these crazy prompts!</p>

<p>sure i'll read it.</p>