<p>assignment : should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affects their communities or nations in general ?</p>
<p>Topic :</p>
<p>Governments are not founded for solving every bit problem in individual life ,but they're founded for help people to solve their problems by themselves.
of course, there're some many tasks that governments have to do them, but this doesn't mean that individual has not join in helping in community service.
As, the more Powerful that government has, the less freedom that individual will gain,in return.
So individuals and governments must share responsibility together.</p>
<p>Once, I watched a short movie shows how effective is the individual in society. it was called " when you walk the country walks" . it was talking about a young boy , who saw a big tree dropped in the middle of the street caused a traffic jam, although no one tries to do something.the Boy take a Positive positions and started to move the tree out of the road. his attitude encourage a number of people to help and then more and more people join him until the tree was removed.and this shows us how individual can do more for his society.</p>
<p>Another Example, epitomized by the Globe economical crisis . Individuals around the world have a big role in solving it.because the best the solution that might any government reach to it , will has no effect if the individual doesn't join in it . If individuals didn't revise their financial policies in spending and all this staffs . whatever the government do for solving the problem,nothing will be happen .</p>
<pre><code> Finally , I encourage the idea that said that individual must share responsibility with government and has a role in solving their problems . As this will allow them to have a better life that their current one . And even. if they have the most government and ministries in the world that will make a great plans for them , when they share responsibility with them this will make their life better.
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<p>Please help me to know my weak points ?
and Grade my essay ?
thank you ,</p>
<p>I’m not really sure how to grade your essay, but maybe a 5?
I got a 790 on the Writing, to show my qualifications </p>
<p>1) You need better organization. I like the 4 paragraphs, but the sentences are running into each other. Clear punctuation and capitalization will help. You also need a clear thesis statement. The grammar is incorrect in some places.</p>
<p>2) Your topics are good. The message is good as well. The body paragraph has problems with grammar and sentence structure as well, which will be graded poorly. </p>
<p>3) The conclusion has a good message behind it, but the writing is poor. In general, you only need a 1 - 2 sentence introduction, with a clear thesis statement. Then the two paragraphs, as you have above, and a 2 - 3 sentence conclusion. </p>
<p>Please ask me if you need more help. I’d be happy to give you more feedback</p>
<p>You have some serious, fundamental grammar and mechanics issues that must be addressed to score higher than a 6 out of 12.</p>
<p>Thank you very much guys for helping me …
actually i know that i have many grammar errors, because English is not my first language.
So please if you can help me to improve my grammar.
and thank you very much .:))</p>
<p>I edited the essay, but please look at my comments below:</p>
<p>Governments are not founded to solve every problem in an individuals life, but instead to help people to solve their problems by themselves.
Of course, there are some tasks that governments have to do for them, but this doesn’t mean that the individual should not join help with community service.
The more powerful a government is, the less freedom individuals have.
So individuals and governments must share responsibility together.</p>
<p>Once, I watched a short movie that showed how effective the individual is in society.Iit was called " when you walk the country walks" . It was about a young boy who saw a big tree that dropped in the middle of the street and caused a traffic jam, but no one stopped to go anything. The boy took a positive positions and started to move the tree out of the road. His attitude encouraged a number of people to help and then more and more people join him until the tree was removed. This shows us how the individual can do more for his society.</p>
<p>Another example is the global economic crisis. Individuals around the world have a big role in solving it. The best solution a government might have will has no effect if the individual doesn’t participate. If individuals don’t revise their financial policies in spending the governments solution will not work.</p>
<p>Finally , I encourage the idea that the individual must share responsibility with government and have a role in solving their problems. This will allow them to have a better life than their current one . Even if they have the most government and ministries in the world that will make great plans for them, their life would be better if they share responsibility.</p>
<p>Please read these edits carefully.
However,CC help can never help enough with this.
Before you take the SAT, you need to speak to an English teacher or SAT tutor to improve your English writing skills.
Are you taking the TOEFL? I’m not sure how strong your English skills are, and am equally worried about how you’ll do on the Writing or Reading sections of the SAT. When are taking the SAT? Are you taking classes?
For general SAT writing skills, you shouldn’t use difficult words if you’re not sure how to use it. Also, be careful not to have run on sentences.</p>
<p>Really you help me so much .
actually , i talk to my Sat tutor and he gave some rules . but when i come to write an essay. I feel confused so i can’t apply those rules well .I answer most writing questions right,But my problem is at the essay.</p>
<p>any way thank you so much for you caring . 
:)</p>