Help Score this Essay?

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<p>What do you guys think this essay deserved/help improve? this is from the most recent Oct (2010) SAT:</p>

<p>Is it important for people to spend time outdoors and to learn to appreciate the natural environment? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>TY all (:</p>

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<p>probably a 10</p>

<p>i liked how the thesis developed the prompt more and condensed it, not just “yes”</p>

<p>personally i wouldn’t say “clearly” though…idk if its just personal preference but it feels too powerful and limiting and might open up contradictions. I don’t think that affected your score in any way but I just wanted to point it out haha.</p>

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<p>thanks! anyone else care to take a look?? (:</p>

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<p>It’s pretty good so I would probably give it a 10/12.</p>

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<p>TY!!bumpbump</p>