Help! Statement of intent uf!!!

Applying to College
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<p>Hi guys,</p>

<p>I hope you could read and tell me if what I am going to send to UF sounds good and looks great. I will accept your opinions in how to improve it.THANK YOU</p>

<p>QUESTION:What are the core skills and knowledge you hope to acquire by completing a degree in this major and how do you plan to apply these when you graduate?</p>

<p>By the time I finish my Bachelor of Arts in Economics, I will have acquired an extensive knowledge that I will apply into my career;furthermore, I am heavily interested in Socioeconomics. Society, Monopolies, and Government Regulations are topics that had kept my attention. We are living in a economy that is having several technological changes, which are affecting low-skilled workers; therefore, firms are rising their revenues by giving a negative effect to our society. These technological advances will keep moving forward. For that reason, the core skills and knowledge that I will gain are going to be applied into each research that I will develop. One of my greatest ambitions of taking this path as an Economist is to have enough experience to participate and propose solutions to governments that are having an increase in their workforce followed by a deficit in their employment.
After graduating, I will pursuit a Master Degree, which will allow me to keep upgrading my knowledge.</p>

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<p>Hi, it must be Sept 3rd and the app is finally on-line!</p>

<p>You should post your questions in the UF forum, where you’re more likley to get a response. </p>

<p>Good Luck!</p>

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<p>The thrust is great, but you need serious proof-editing for grammar/syntax and word choice. (I assume you have a responsible adult at home or at school to help you with that, as I don’t think it can be easily done in this kind of forum.)</p>

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<p>I second thecrookedone’s comment. Good content, but needs serious grammar check</p>