Help With Common App Essay

College Essays
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I’m a rising senior who is attempting to write a bomb common app college essay hahaha but I don’t know if my essay idea is good or creative enough. SOOO I need some help.

My essay topic is basically the idea that I am living and basing my life like an endothermic reaction (Chemistry Topic). Where the highs and lows of the reaction represent/parallel the highs and lows of my life. Along with this, the other concept of this essay is that despite the reaction’s highs and lows the endothermic reaction will always gain energy/have a positive change in energy at the end of the reaction. And this will apply to my life that despite all the highs and lows of my life these great or harsh experiences will teach me something in the end and I’ll gain something from each one thus paralleling to the gain in energy.

Of course, this concept still needs to be thought out more but I just want to make sure I’m in the right direction. And all criticism good or bad is welcomed!

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I think the concept sounds really good, but you have to be careful with a couple things. For one, make sure that you have specific examples you can draw on that give an insight into you. In addition, when combining your comparison with your specific examples, you are going to be severely limited in all you can say by the word count limit. With all this in mind, you still have to make sure it sounds natural and not clipped…

I recommend writing a rough draft of all you want to say and if it’s impossible to cut down while keeping all the important parts, maybe choosing a different topic. Good luck!