Help with common app short asnwer

<p>I wrote the common app short answer, can someone please give me editing suggestions and shortening ideas because the limit is 1000 characters (about 160 words) and I wrote about 1,195 (200 words) Much thanks in advance!</p>

<p>Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work expereince in the space below (1000 character maximum).</p>

<p>In my sophomore year of high school I joined my schools newspaper and quickly developed a profound passion for journalism and for being a voice for the student body. I started as a staff writer and gained valuable experience writing articles, conducting interviews and selling advertisement to help fund our paper. Throughout the year, not only did I witness my journalistic skills improve drastically, but I also found and interest in writing feature articles. I thus spent my first year as a journalism student writing various articles featuring students who had endured hardships in their lives including drug usage, being a student in a foreign country and teen pregnancy. Having the opportunity to sit down and interview these students at my high school was important to me because I felt that it was important to raise awareness about all sorts of different issues that were not only occurring globally, but also in our very own high school. Now as Editor-In-Chief of the paper, while my responsibilities range from delegating stories to managing the overall design of the newspaper, my hope is that I am able to instill in my current staff the same passion I have for journalism in them.</p>

<p>Take out the last two word (“in them”). I know it is only a minor change but it makes the last sentence sound less awkward.</p>

<p>It should be “school’s” in the first sentence right? Sorry if you had not edited yet.</p>

<p>A number of your sentences start out wordy e.g. “Having the opportunity to . . .”
Break up last long sentence into several shorter or one short, one medium.
Cut out “thus” in “I thus spent . . .”</p>

<p>thank you all! these edits really helped</p>

<p>You may also want to keep in mind that though the given limit is 1,000 characters, the real limit is the space in the print preview. The 1,000 character limit is just a number that will usually keep your response from being cut off in the limited space provided. Because of flukes with small characters (commas, periods, etc.) you may be able to fit a little more.</p>

<p>It’s not like the essay, where you could upload a 6-pager and get an unfair advantage (or bore the admissions officers to death) with extra information provided. Nobody’s going to care as long as the response fits.</p>