Help with Common app. transfer essay!!

Transfer Students
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<p>Okay so, I really need some help here, my essay was 3,200 words=(, I write too much Are there any suggestions about cutting down?</p>

<p>My reasoning: I tried to include so many different thing such as why I switched majors, why I decided to transfer for that new major and why i'm interested in it, like my rational for the new major, I don't know i'm an over-analytical mess, I just need some guidance on this essay</p>

<p>I attend Roger Williams University in RI and am sending transfer apps to Brown and Umass Amherst, I already got accepted to Umass Amherst as a freshman last year. I'm not looking for any elitist ivy obsessed comments (Im from Boston, I've heard enough) I just want some tips on condensing and writing a good transfer essay</p>

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<p>Wow… 3,200 words. You can send it to me and I’ll look over it when I have time :/</p>

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<p>How many words should it be? I over write myself and always have to cut my 2,000 words to 1,200. I can’t help you without seeing it.</p>

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<p>I have a bit of free time this week so I can look a it. I’ll do it on Word w/ track changes. I usually have the same problem as you where I use a ton of words and end up sounding redundant so I always go back to reduce and condense.</p>

<p>I myself am working on my transfer applications to JMU and UVa, so if you think it’s conflict of interest, I understand.</p>

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<p>PM it over!</p>

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<p>Thanks guys I will PM as soon as I can, Ive been editing a little but still need a critique</p>

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<p>pm me : ) i have done with application lol</p>

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<p>Hi,</p>

<p>im working on apps now too…</p>

<p>yes, i completely get the whole overanalyzing problem. i will definitely read it and offer my thoughts. :-)</p>

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<p>Hey, pm it over. I might be of help!</p>