Help with Essay URGENT

<p>Hi there,
i'm currently in the process of a transfer from an art school in
London back to an academic school in the US.
I grew up in NJ and did my first 2 years abroad at a school called Central Saint Martins
so i'm 20 now.<br>
I am submitting my transfer essay soon, but i really need some help with the content and structure
especially given that I have had such an untraditional background in art and am not considering switching back to academics.<br>
please let me know if you can take a look at it
i am planning to submit the common app essay by this fri
and rutgers essay by this weekend
Jenn </p>