<p>I think it’s pretty terrible. You make numerous exaggerated claims that only serve to make you look arrogant. Words like “inherent” and “solvency” are misused and detract from the essay. Sweeping negative generalizations about society/politicians sound even more elitist and do not contribute to your statement’s purpose. Don’t tell the college that debate looks better than other activities. “undisputable” is not a word, try “indisputable”. Watch your pronoun use; You hastily are changing from “we” to “you” to “our” to “people”.</p>
<p>Also, false dichotomies certainly exist; as you will recall from your debate experience, fallacies are common, and pointing them out is critical. </p>
<p>FYI, saying the value of these skills is “indisputable” is tragically ironic, given you said anything is debatable.</p>
<p>I’m being extremely critical, but remember the volume of essays admissions officers read. They will be this critical.</p>