Help with personal statement!!

<p>Hi guys,
I have a personal statement for an application written down. The thing with it is that its limited to 1200 characters. Is there anyone that can read it and give me suggestions and see if it needs to be improved?
If anyone is interested send back a response, and can send it to you.</p>

<p>Thanks a lot!</p>

<p>Sure, PM it. Is it just a regular ‘why transfer’ statement?</p>

<p>I PM’d it, thanks!</p>

<p>I can have a look at it too, if you want.</p>

<p>I did, thanks</p>

<p>I have sent you a short reply. Hope it has arrived.</p>

<p>sure ill take a look</p>

<p>I wont mind taking a look and it and offering you some suggestions.</p>

<p>I would be glad to offer some constructive criticism.</p>