<p>Can anybody help me revise my personal statement for the University of California?</p>
<p>suggestions, corrections, and comments are all appreciated</p>
<p>Prompt: Describe the world you come from for example, your family, community or school and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. </p>
<p>My life does not consist of many hardships; I have never been homeless; I have never been hungry; I have never been abused. I have had a truly blessed childhood. My parents have always provided for me.
From kindergarten through eighth grade, I attended a private Catholic school. There, I received a solid education enriched with aspects of Catholicism. I gained attributes such as responsibility, kindness, respect, and discipline, just as a child from any school would. I was required to wear a uniform and to adhere to strict rules and regulations, but learned to accept them. After being there for several years, I got used to all of the requirements. Over the years, I acquired a close-knit group of friends whom I shared many qualities and interests with. We were the most studious and academically skilled group of students in our grade. We obeyed all of the rules and turned in all of our assignments on time. I deeply enjoyed and cherished those nine years at that school. Towards the end of my eighth grade year, the majority of my friends and fellow classmates were preparing to attend private Catholic high schools. I on the other hand, was hearing many stories about the public high school that I would be attending in the fall. At first, I was excited to go to that high school, but I became worried after hearing several negative things about it. I was warned by classmates that academics were less important and gangs were more prevalent in the public school system. I was confused and sought guidance from my parents who told me to keep an open mind and have a positive attitude. I took my parents advice and learned that public school was very different from my small private schoolbut in a good way. My high school experience was amazing and enlightening; I met many different types of people and had the freedom to choose my own academic path. I realized that many of my private school friends were wrongfully judging public schools, even though they had never actually attended one. I believe that my transition from a private to public school has made me a better person. Although it was difficult for me to adjust at first, I learned that being open-minded is the key to success and happiness. If I had come to my new high school scared and pessimistic, I probably would not have had such a wonderful high school experience. By being open-minded, I made a great, diverse set of friends and became involved with the school. I tried out for the soccer team, and made the varsity team in my junior year. I also joined several clubs that helped me get involved with the community; volunteering and working with children made me realize my dream of pursuing a career in pediatric medicine. Being an open-minded person has created many opportunities for me and has guided me to being the person I am today. I am positive that the open-mindedness that helped me transition into my high school will do the same for my upcoming college experience, and ultimately, my future.</p>