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<p>Two essays. For some reason, I just couldn't include vocabulary words in the second essay.</p>

<p>Prompt: Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power?</p>

<p>Money, fame, and power are all motivators that tempt mankind. They’re the forbidden fruit that all humans(humanity) want but know they shouldn’t have. While the purest have managed to avoid these temptations; money, fame and power are nonetheless a much more powerful motivator then conscience.</p>

<p>In the novel Huckleberry Finn, Huck Finn travels to the South in a attempt to save the runaway slave by the name of Jim. As the novel progresses, Huck realizes how corrupt mankind is. He sees cantankerous men fighting for money and a boat. He sees men scamming entire towns all for the sake of some quick cash. He sees men and women trying to pass of as others for fame and power. While Huck’s conscience proves pristine, the rest of society has fallen into the trap for money, fame and power.</p>

<p>This theme is also depicted in the novel The Great Gatsby. In it, the protagonist Nick Carraway watches his neighbor lie, cheat, and steal for money fame and power all for the persuit(Pursuit) of a girl he loves. He sees the evils in the opulent society as resembled by Tom and how these temptations have created a void in his conscience.</p>

<p>While these protagonists are made to be intractable, the rest of mankind aren’t as lucky. In the glitzy modern age where money, fame and power means every(thing), humanity has lost touched with their conscience. It takes 67 blilion(SP) dollars to end world poverty, but the world isn’t willing to pay (for it). Men can account for a third of their country’s GDP but never spend money to boost it’s infrastructure. Mankind only serves to further their temptations. </p>

<p>Prompt: Has the world improved for the better</p>

<p>Global warming ravaging the world, impending nuclear wars, and diseases threatening to become pandemics are constant problems that the world faces. And while the media will never cease to force these problems down our throats, it also paradoxly, resembles why the world has changed for the better. The world has grown into a society where problems are pointed out and are able to become addressed. </p>

<pre><code>Think back to The Roman Empire or The Middle Ages and one can see how society never questioned the ruling party and the world. Men and women were taught to believe that their world was perfect and that no problems existed. Because of this, technology stagnated. It took centuries for men to realize that the world was not round, and it took even longer for men to realize that evolution existed. As problems were not mentioned, they couldn’t be addressed. In the 1200s, the Magna Carta was created allowing for the people to freely criticize the ruling party, but that wasn’t enough. Communication wasn’t advanced enough for society to address their problems.

Now compare mankind’s past with the present day. When problems are recognized, humanity can immediately take steps to solve it. In the 1960’s, acid rain was first discovered to come from industrial plants that released nitrous oxide through the world. However, scientists immediately took steps to neutralize this and as a result, nitrous oxide levels have decreased by over 50% in the last 40 years. In the 1970’s, there was a time during the Cold War, when the Russians believed that the U.S. had launched a nuclear missile at the “motherland”. However, with the use of radar and technology, it was discovered that the supposed missile was only a group of birds migrating to a warmer area.

By being able to recognize our problems, the world has finally been able to effectively start fixing our problems. Because of this, the world is in fact changing for the better.
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<p>1st) 11. Inclusion of two great novels and maybe you could also have used the corruption in some of today’s 3rd world countries.</p>

<p>2nd) 9-10. It really seems impersonal and aloof, despite the two comparisons you drew up.</p>

<p>Can we use a thesis: the world has improved for both the better and the worse? It would be easier to come up with examples.</p>

<p>Yeah, I kinda tried to use logic for the second essay. Guess that’s out.</p>

<p>Question: Do people place too much emphasis on winning? </p>

<p>When humanity thinks of the term “winning”, they define it exclusively to meaningless competitions like sports. However, winning transcends and overshadows this. Winning is a bi-product of all competition and to displace the idea would cause mankind to become complacent ant not improve. Hence, there can never be too much emphasis on winning.</p>

<p>Ever since bacteria started developing three billion years ago, the idea of winning has become engraved in all organisms. Species were forced to play a game against “life”. Striving to pass on it’s offspring, species were forced to battle against other species like itself for the limited resources on the planet. And it was through these competitions that species bettered themselves. Evolution would not take place without an emphasis on winning these everyday battles. The idea that we may still be bacteria without an emphasis on winning is a humbling thought.</p>

<p>Nonetheless, competition grew and mankind eventually developed. Yet, only through competition would mankind progress. It was no coincidence that Charles Darwin published his iconic theory of evolution only when a man named Wallace had begun researching the topic himself. Darwin realized that the need to “win” and claim credit for the idea and rushed to publish his theories. It was no coincidence that humanity saw a dramatic rise in technology during the Cold War. During it, the United States and the USSR were each battling to bettering themselves and “win” the war of attrition. It was a period of unparalleled technoloigcal growth that transcended any other age.</p>

<p>Placing too much emphasis on winning has never ceased to deter growth. Mankind only builds on this competition between themselves furthering the human race. This fact has not changed for over three billion years.</p>