How do you show and not tell?

College Essays
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<p>I'm having trouble showing with imagery. Instead I find myself using common phrases (I realized that... overcome challenges). Can anyone help me use better wording to connect my ideas?</p>

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<p>What is your topic?</p>

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<p>From the CommonApp.</p>

<p>Evaluate a signifficant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.</p>

<p>I wrote about when I won the spelling bee in my school.</p>

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