how does this topic sound?

College Essays
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<p>which of these do you guys think will work the best for a college essay?</p>

<p>a) i always wanted to change my physical appearance (asian-ness) when i was young - sort of had an identity crisis. but as i learned more about my grandfather, i realized my heritage and began to be proud of it.</p>

<p>b) when i was in second grade, i went to king's dominion (amusement park in VA). i was with my younger sister, 2 younger cousins, aunt, and uncle. we were on line for a Rugrats bumpercar ride. before going on the ride, the people who worked there measured our heights and we had to be smaller than a certain height. unfortunately, i was taller, so i had to wait in the "adult" section since i couldnt go on. so then i could talk about moving from childhood to adulthood..</p>

<p>c) i do research on hepatitis C, and i wanted to put in some latin phrases/quotes in my essay that would go along with the topic of research...</p>

<p>which of these sounds the best?</p>

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<p>The first one is absurdly cliche, the second one is boring and not unique at all, and the third one just sounds pretentious. If I HAD to pick (and I shouldn’t have to- if you really search yourself for something meaningful and something that you can gush about, you wont second guess yourself) I would pick the second one. Keep brainstorming. Narrative essays work best so think about some meaningful stories</p>

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<p>i wrote my essay for prompt 1. i took a different approach to it, sort of. would you be willing to read it?</p>

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<p>sure, but I tend to be a harsh critic. be prepared for a lot of feedback</p>

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<p>the first one doesn’t sound cliche at all. gl (:</p>

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<p>Use whichever topic allows for the most personal, detailed, and revealing essay.</p>

<p>People here aren’t likely to be able to say which topic that is: how could we know which topic allows you to be the most personal, detailed, and revealing?</p>

<p>Aim to write something that is so you that only you could have written it.</p>

<p>And, of course: show, don’t tell:</p>

<p>[Show</a>, don’t tell](<a href=“http://users.wirefire.com/tritt/tip1.html]Show”>http://users.wirefire.com/tritt/tip1.html)</p>

<p>Here is some more advice about college essays:</p>

<p>[Essays</a>, Admission Information, Undergraduate Admission, U.Va.](<a href=“http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html]Essays”>http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html)</p>

<p>I think that it is hard to write relevant essays on the topic of early childhood. Hard, not impossible. Still, your readers want to be shown what you are like now. Anecdotes about second grade, no matter how cleverly presented, may not be sufficiently revealing of the 17-or-so-year-old that you are today.</p>