Bull crud on that article! I’ve posted what were deemed excellent essays from JHU and Cornell kids and they all sound insanely edited helicoptered versions of what kids would write, but after reading my child’s essays I’m not so sure because it was pretty darn good (big fancy words etc). She didn’t need any of them lol (going to a school ranked about 500 in the country 32 ACT 3.91UW) lol.
All she did was take a “normal” word then look up similar one “synonyms dad a thes-orrrr-us thingy” to make it sound better and it was decent enough.
Here is a sample piece from a essay on the internet deemed excellent by JHU sounds pretty tweaked to me, but very well may not because my daughter wrote much the same way.
“Because engineering does not exist in a vacuum, a HOST minor will complement my work by helping me understand the sociopolitical, cultural, and ethical issues that drive scientific developments. Equipped with this holistic vision, I will be able to adopt technically-sound yet socially responsible methodologies toward the solution of different problems.”