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This essay is perhaps, 400 words, which is quite achievable in not only under 25 minutes but also under 2 pages. It is not however, a 12/12.</p>
<p>Vision17: Your thesis is good though I don’t understand the logic behind using a mathematical analogy if you aren’t using mathematical examples, it just makes your introduction seem a touch strident.</p>
<p>You provide strong knowledge of examples and your use of specific details is pleasing. You do not need any more examples, instead, you need to link your examples more strongly to the prompt and your thesis. Too often throughout your analysis I am left to infer its relevance. </p>
<p>Nonetheless, everything else is sound or done very effectively. </p>
<p>This essay is a bit harder to score as it does not really answer the prompt: Should people choose one of two opposing sides of an issue, or is the truth usually found “in the middle”?. Based on this I’d say this essay could score anywhere between 7 and 11.</p>