How to use dialogue? in essay

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<p>Hello, </p>

<p>I can't seem to figure out how to use dialogue the right way in my essay. Here is a random part of it. I'm hoping to get help and tips on what i'm doing wrong and right.</p>

<p>Thank you,</p>

<p>My English class had 28 boys and 4 girls; it was a mess. I sat in the back of the class with my friends. We would throw airplanes and Ms. Sheck wouldn't know who it was. There was this kid who sat in the right front of the room because he didn't have the best hearing. He was the only kid I hoped the airplane didn't hit.
One day I saw him in the hallway and tried my best to talk to him.
I said, “Hey bro, how’s it going?”
He said, “Everything is fine, how about you?”
I said, “Good, i’m sorry, I didn't catch your name.”
He said, “Matt”
I found out he was a pretty cool guy. He liked to watch a lot of movies and play games, just like me. I told him to join Track and Field, he had a lot of fun being part of the team that year.</p>

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<p>Ignoring the tone, grammar, and style of the excerpt you posted, your quotation formatting is correct. Try to mix it up a bit, though - rather than starting everything with “I said” or “He said,” try to vary the sentences by putting these parts after the quotation, changing the verb (saying “shouted” or “asked”, for example, instead of “said”), adding some adverbs (“He shouted angrily”), or leaving it off altogether (I said, “Hey bro, how’s it going?” / He said, “Everything is fine, how about you?” / “Good, i’m sorry, I didn’t catch your name.” / “Matt”).</p>

<p>I will also add that you should have someone help you with the grammar and tone of this essay before you send it in.</p>

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<p>I will do all the above, I have been working on it for the past few hours so yeah. and I will have multiple people look over it.</p>

<p>Thank you again!</p>