<p>Nice work Admiral...
I'm surprised that someone just spent a good deal of time out of their ridiculously short (Harvard and their breaks!) vacation to edit, comment and criticize an essay of a Harvard applicant. </p>
<p>virtuoso_735....do take Admiral's advice to heart. It's very good advice for that matter.</p>
<p>Aside from all the writing/stylistic details Admiral (and others) pointed out, I will reemphasize the need for your essay to be about you, and less about pH or whatever.</p>