<p>It's good, but you used passive tense a bit and I wouldn't mention your interest in "herptiles" because it adds nothing in the story and does not discuss your main subject.</p>
<p>Good job, though. Nice champagne line.</p>
<p>It's good, but you used passive tense a bit and I wouldn't mention your interest in "herptiles" because it adds nothing in the story and does not discuss your main subject.</p>
<p>Good job, though. Nice champagne line.</p>