<p>Admiral, I understand you are a probably very busy individual, but seeing how you cut down virtuoso_735's essay, I was wondering if you would be willing to trim mine down. It's one I used for Harvard's optional essay and what I plan on using for Princeton's "Someone who inspired you," and Yale's additional essay (any topic). I have to cut about 21 words.
If you are willing, I'll PM it to you. Thanks!</p>