I applied to Yale with this essay and was deferred

College Essays
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<p>Anyone care to critique my essay beyond the simple mechanics? I need advice on how to make it brilliant and not just good. I'm looking for experienced readers, thx.</p>

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<p>Sure. I’ll look it over for you. :] I’m up…</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look at it too.</p>

<p>I was also deferred from Yale.</p>

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<p>Essays sent. Any other takers?</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look at this. Plz send me.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it. I tutor English and my SAT essays were in the top 3 percentile in the U.S. <a href=“mailto:lucmark@iusb.edu”>lucmark@iusb.edu</a></p>

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<p>Sorry, I am only willing to send essays to people with 200+ post counts.</p>

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<p>plz send me. I will read it over with passion.</p>

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<p>I’d love to read it. PM it over.</p>

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<p>i’d love to read it too :D</p>

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<p>HAHA i made a similar thread. </p>

<p>People who aren’t experienced, I don’t even know why you are bothering to put “Sure PM”… We’re not stupid, you know. ;)</p>

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<p>Sure I’ll read it…i’m an '09er but i already applied…just waiting now lol</p>

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<p>Sounds interesting.
already accepted into my EA school :]</p>

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<p>i’ll take a read if you want improvements for other schools.</p>

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<p>i’ll read, also deferred from Yale.</p>

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<p>I’ll read yours…if you read mine (i was also deferred from Yale)</p>

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<p>if you can all tell me your email addresses via PM, i’ll send my essays through that.</p>

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<p>pm it to me… i got into yale, so i’d like to see…</p>

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<p>sure ill read it.</p>

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<p>sure, ill take a look</p>